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Friday, June 4, 2010

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This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 11; the eleventh edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following
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U have the courage to leave traces behind.
Brave enough to show u came.
What stops u from meeting the eye
Lest u fret the morning sun

Hidden in the dark, wonder what games u play
When u came, how long u stayed?
Over the cup of coffee I mull,
What the wet roads, have got to say

Sooner or later we got to meet
We know u’ve got a date with us
Why then play this hide and seek
Just pour and pour, get off the heat!

19 comments:

  1. Abhijit BhattacharyyaJune 04, 2010

    nice spontaneous....

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  2. SJune 05, 2010

    That was a real message conveyed through some brilliant use of words. I like it! :)

    All the best for BAT!
    Hidden...in love with me and life! :)

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  3. Vinay Leo R.June 05, 2010

    good poem.. :)

    nicely versed thoughts!

    Leo - Hidden

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  4. TuppenceJune 05, 2010

    That was beautiful . Loved it .
    Talking about rain .Wasn't it.
    Or a fond dream which leaves behind some vague memory and then fades from memory when you wake up.
    Then you wait in anticipation and hope wishing all the time to live that dream in reality .
    All the best for batom
    -- tuppence

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  5. AnonymousJune 05, 2010

    Very well articulate usage of words to portray a picturesque poem. Nice one. All the best for Baton 11 !!

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  6. Brijender SinghJune 05, 2010

    Must say ur words mirror almost everyone's thoughts !
    But,if i may,you could have written much more-its a pity to leave it after writing so well all through.

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  7. RocksaJune 06, 2010

    Aha! Now that is a nice way of invoking the Rain Gods to shower their blessings in the form of droplets straight from heaven :) Nice take on the topic! Good luck with BATOM :)
    Raksha - Hidden

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  8. AnonymousJune 06, 2010

    Nicely written :) a different way of expresing your wait for the rain :) All the best for BATOM :)

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  9. aayanmanJune 06, 2010

    I think this is a good effort, however use of slang like U instead of you - is a bit distracting- unless of couse it was by design.

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  10. Siddhesh KabeJune 06, 2010

    nice one...:D

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  11. GauriJune 06, 2010

    That surely will have pleased the Rain Gods! Very nice :)

    ATB for BATOM :)

    Gkam: Hidden

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  12. Er.June 06, 2010

    Smartly thought. Well written! :)

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  13. Er.June 06, 2010

    All the best for BAT!

    PS: http://bit.ly/thestupidgirl

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  14. Mahesh Aadhya KalalJune 07, 2010

    loved the first 3 lines....
    they made me to rethink about certain things...
    nice expression:)

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  15. Tavish Chadha(sensible-bakwas.com)June 08, 2010

    hey that was really nice...

    btw I think u forgot to put the HTML tags in ur post... do that else it may get disqualified....

    Cheers!
    Tavish

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  16. NethraJune 09, 2010

    That was a nice poem on rain but you should have used "you" instead of "u". Nevertheless, it was beautiful. :)

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  17. DeepikaJune 10, 2010

    i think, ur poem worked!!! nice!!! ;)

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  18. missydeeJune 16, 2010

    Very well said, especially with the monsoon around the corner!

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  19. AntoJune 26, 2010

    Hi Viyoma,
    Its actually raining here at the moment, I just woke up from an afternoon nap and was sipping tea. I landed to your post from my blog. And this poem! I am flat!! Simply awesome. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece of work.

    Cheers!

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