Monday, June 4, 2012

Freedom Gambled


Pride at stake,they left, as the Elders watched them leave.
The passion for Dice, ruined it all- was for everyone to see.

Torn between anger and guilt they left,
Bowed heads, heavy heart ensured- no eyes met.

Paradise of Comfort – was now a Stranger’s Land
The snake named “Greed” - had bit their hand

Riot on their minds, but they did not evoke
Arrow in the Arm – but they ignored.

“Stand by your Word” goes the ancient verse
Cheat Not – dutifully follow the course”

12 Years of Exile, 1 Year in Disguise,
No arms, No Guards – but God on their side.

Said the evening Sun to the chirpy birds
"Remember this day- for it, shall lead to war".

This post is part of the contest Ten words to a Story(or Poem).. on WriteUpCafe.com

10 comments:

  1. excellent and thoughful indeed
    even i love writing poetry and so moved to participate in this contest...All the best

    Following u :)

    Jasmeet
    http://emotestar.blogspot.in

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  2. Omg thats really nice. :)
    Great work. I specially liked the title.

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  3. Enjoyed your interpretation and the emotion your writing brings out. Powerful stuff, well done. Look forward to reading more.
    Best of luck with the competition.

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  4. very beautiful poetry and loved the emotions behind it... thanks for blessing this.. if you have free time stop by my blog to read a good creativity. I'm sure you will love it..

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  5. great poetry with great emotion.. liked it.. all the best for the contest.......

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  6. Cool poem to depict the story line of Mahabharatha :)

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  7. Riot on their minds, but they did not evoke
    Arrow in the Arm – but they ignored.


    Awesome lines. We need more of these to bring peace in the world.

    Lovely write up!

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  8. AnonymousJune 18, 2012

    Excellant!!!

    Powerful and nicely used the words. :)

    Now following you. :)

    All the best!!

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  9. hello this is excellent...

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